This one is called "Roads".

When all else fails,
I will trudge on
with a silent face.

Persisting to overcome,
I continue damaged and hopeful,

refusing to throw myself
at the mercy of this court.

This one is called "Faultline".

This is the era of irrationality.
Within the time it takes to gasp,
readily speaking in tongues and minor keys.

Readily jumping the gun, falling to knees.
Please believe me.
The only light comes from candles in hand.

This tension beckons bridges to collapse
but this dissonance begets a resolution.
I pray for a perfect fifth.

Hmm... I get what you are saying, which is good. Also, nice rhythm. Really digging the second poem. Overall, nice job TY.

i always thought they were grey shades of obscure crap.

but thank you, it helps to have an outsider's opinion.

ThousandYoung wrote:

i always thought they were grey shades of obscure crap.

I hear ya, buddy, and that's why i never think of writing lyrics or poetry. XD

The thing about writing is it can be obscure. People translate it using what they think it means. A poem could have several meanings and themes. The ones that some think are random can be valuable to others. It just depends on the person, and their views.